Friday, April 12, 2013

Punc--EEK! Comma Chameleon

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Okay, my age is showing. Please don’t laugh at me. The point is, commas can do a chameleon job on a sentence.  For example:

The driver who won the race was awarded a trophy.
The driver, who won the race, was awarded a trophy.

Although both of these sentences are punctuated correctly, they mean very different things.

In the first sentence, with no commas, any driver who won got a trophy. In grammatical terms, “who won the race” is restrictive. It restricts who gets the trophy.

In the second sentence, the driver, who just happened to win the race, got a trophy. In grammatical terms, “who won the race” is nonrestrictive. The driver got a trophy, and oh by the way, also won the race.

Maybe it will make more sense in context:
1. The driver who won the race was awarded a trophy. The driver who came in second got a bottle of champagne. The other drivers were awarded a dashboard plaque.
2. The driver, who won the race, was awarded a trophy. The pit crew was treated to a party. The team owner received a large check.

In example 1, “who won the race” specifies which driver. Only the winner gets a trophy. The paragraph concerns the rewards given to the participants in the race. In example 2, which concerns the rewards given to the members of a racing team, “who won the race” is just a bit of extra information and could be eliminated without changing the meaning.

Remember the example from a couple weeks ago? “I’d like you to meet my brother Dave.” The same rule applies. What this sentence means is, “I’d like to introduce you to my brother named Dave. My brother named Tom isn’t here.” Dave and Tom are restrictive because they specify which brother. (Not that either of my brothers has ever been able to restrict me. Hah.)

Got a headache yet? Don’t get too hung about the definition of restrictive vs. nonrestrictive. Just remember this--if the information in the phrase or clause could be deleted without changing the meaning of the sentence, you need to put commas around it. If the information specifies a particular person or thing, do not use commas.

Incidentally, another way to determine whether or not to use commas is to try putting dashes or parentheses around the words. If you could do so without changing the meaning, use commas. Be aware, however, that dashes are very emphatic, and parentheses are generally frowned on in fiction.

Note to my readers in southern New Hampshire: I’ll be speaking at noon about “Place as a Character” at the Southern NH Outdoor Recreation Show tomorrow, April 13, 2013. For more information, go to


  1. Place as Character is a wonderful discussion for mystery readers and writers.

  2. Thank you for the comma points. Much appreciated. R

  3. Thanks for sharing the information about the proper use of comma's, Nikki! :-)

  4. Excellent, as always, Nikki. Beautifully explained. You should gather these together for a book on commas when you're done. It might supplant the classic Elements of Style.

  5. Thanks for stopping in, everyone. It's good to hear that my discussions are helpful to you. Nancy, I don't think anything could supplant Elements of Style. But perhaps supplement it? Jacqueline, I think place is important for every genre, not just mystery.

  6. I like comma Chameleon! Informative post,Nikki. Sorry to have to miss your presentation tomorrow. It sounds fascinating!

    1. Ute, the way the weather looks, not even the vendors are going to show up. Maybe I'll just turn my talk into a blog post.

  7. Another great example - thanks, Nikki!